»Mobil Ave Neo's Matrix 4: Program Revolutions«

Mr. Th3 P4th, you're a gentlemen and a scholar and totally beat me to the punch on that one. Thanks for the compilation. And Mr. M_Ave good to see you're still around for I wait in my bored cubicle for the next installment.

may the force be w/ you....oh wait wrong salutory allusion. well you get the point.

Thank you thank you! It's great to have him back!

thanks th3 p4th! thats really cool how you fixed that up!

nice, th3 p4th that is a great idea and its good to have you back mobil

Seriously, tried not to do this. But the level of bordom in my little grey cube is ridiculous. Ready for another good read, dawg!

Yes yes I am on it

I always suffer from writer's block but once I get started again, there is no stopping me.

BTW, it was you who asked me if I was a part of MxO?

No I am not. I never played it and for months I have not been following the news and rumors about it.

Yeah it was me asking about Mxo. I think that your story is solid, but didn't know if you incorporated MxO into it. Either way, I look forward to the next installment.

I'm the same way w/ my music. I'll go weeks w/o writing anything and then in 5 minutes I've got a new song. So, good luck!

i think its great to here that it will have another installment soon!

Alright MAveNeo, I got another song down. I too get some serious block when it comes to my artform. I figured its now you're turn.

(ok i did get another song out, but i basicially again bored out of my cube here and i left my cs lewis at home. lets hear it for another installment?)

good luck

Neo walks into the underground garage we all know from M3.

He notices that there are no guards at the elevator, rising his suspicion to a trap. But what can he do? They have his son, so he has no other choice than to barge into club Hel...

He steps into the elevator and presses the red button...

Arriving in the lobby, he still doesn't encouter any resistance, so with ease he walks on straight towards the dancefloor.

When he enters it, he sees alot of exiles gathered together. In the center of them he sees his son standing up. He is being held by Cain and he is blindfolded. Persephone stands close to them and she wears her familiar sexy dress we saw her wear before in club Hel.

Cain is setting his vampiric teeth into Timothy's neck, not biting just yet...

Persephone:

"This is the effect of the cause: the death of my husband"

Neo (sarcasticly):

"I thought you didn't believe in his arrogant chit-chat"

Persephone:

"Maybe not, but despite everything I loved him!"

Neo:

"Come on, it wasn't even me, it was that dull monk who killed him"

Persephone:

"Maybe so, but you are the ultimate cause of it all."

Neo (still being sarcastic):

"So I guess a kiss is not going to set things right this time now is it?"

Persephone:

"Not even a french kiss!"

Neo (to Cain):

"OK, let him go you shitbag or I'll put your teeth in your own ass!"

Persephone:

"No he is not going to let him go untill I say otherwise. So listen, here is the deal...You will let us kill you willingly, or else Cain will bite your son to his death. So no stopping bullets and that other bullshit!"

Neo (keeping cool and thinking for a few seconds):

"OK, I'll do anything for my son. But you have to give me your word that wou will bring him back to his home unharmed."

Persephone:

"That's a promise!"

Neo:

"And you must give me at least the honour of doing it myself...so if you please would hand me a gun"

Perspehone grabs a gun from one of the exiles and throws it towards Neo who catches it with ease.

Neo puts the gun to his head and closes his eyes...

He stays standing there for about half a minute...

Persephone (with a highly bitchy voice):

"Well come on faggot, pull the trigger!"

Neo is not responding, like he never even heard her and another 15 seconds pass by...

Then we turn to 'neo-vison' and we see that Neo is analyzing/cracking the code surrounding club Hel. The code is heavily encrypted, keeping out the agents. Neo has a though job at it, but he is highly concentrating (that's why he has his eyes closed and can't even hear Persephone).

Then Perspehone and the exiles hear a kind of swirling sound and they look up. In code-vision Persephone sees that the code is getting all mixed up. But before she can react in anger, the swirling sound stops and immediately after that agent Johnson morphs into Timothy...

As a reaction Cain tries to byte, but the strong neck muscle tension from Johnson prevents him from going into the flesh. Immediately Johnson responds and throws Cain through the dance hall, crashing him into the bar, breaking lots of glass.

Neo has mingled into the battle too and he is taking on five exiles at once, with the ease of a ballet-dancer.

Persephone then grabs a machine-gun and fires in full anger at Neo, who offcourse stops the bullets with ease.

Then agent Johnson stands behind her, pressing his gun against her head...

Agent Johnson:

"It's time for deletion!", after which he immediately shoots her in the head, bringing the beautifull mistress to her abrupt end.

There are still about eight exiles in the dance hall, which are dealt with by Neo with his familiar ease (but still very pleasing for the viewer to see his smooth moves).

When all the exiles are knocked out, Neo and agent Jackson stand in front of each other, just like Neo and Smith did during the dialogue prior to the burly brawl.

Agent Johnson:

"Well that's the first time I ever saw the anomaly putting himself to some use."

Neo:

"Leave my son's mind, you macho pencil pusher!"

Agent Johnson:

"No that won't be efficient. Our great master temporarily has set my collegues free from their district restrictions"...

While agent Johnson says this, alot of different agents come walking in from the side of the lobby-entrance.

Agent Johnson:

"You won't stand a change this time, so it would be more efficient if you would surrender right now"

Neo:

"Never!"

What begins is another huge 'burly brawl' but now with all different agents, all from the different regions/districts of the Matrix.

This makes it more appealing for the viewer, because there will be almost no special effects like the clones of agent Smith. Each agent is an unique person who does his own fighting moves

In addition we will see alot of glass- and statue-breaking because the club is full of stuff and the agents fly everywhere...

After about each minute that passes by, more agents come into the club, because the elevator of the club can only bare a group of about 20 agents at a time.

After about five minutes of fighting fun, we see that Neo is being amazed about the amount of agents that keeps coming in...and the most frightening part is: this time he cannot fly up into the air just like that. While we see the worry on Neo's face, we blend into the worry on the face of 'the Kid' Karl Popper who now stands before the Zion council for his so called crime of stealing a Personal Processing Unit...

Councelor Ghost, who is now one of the main 'old' councelors of the council smiles at him...

Ghost:

"Karl I am surpised to see you here"

Prosecuter:

"Well, sir, I know that you think high of him because of what he did in the final stage of the war, but we cannot put anyone above our law. He stole and stealing is forbidden, no matter who does it"

Karl:

"I didn't steal anything counceler Ghost, I swear. They have put me in jail because they are afraid of me"

Ghost:

"I tend to believe you kind, but why would they be afraid of you?"...

Right at that moment someone comes running in and says to councelor Ghost:

"Something weird is going on inside the Matrix, sir"

Ghost:

"What is it? Tell me!"

Guy:

"The agents all have left their districts and have concentrated theirselves on one single point in the Matrix"...

"This point seems to be the exile-base, sir!"

Ghost:

"Well, they are taking on the exiles, that is none of our bussiness."

Guy:

"Well, I don't no, because some of the code patterns..."

Ghost:

"Well, go on!"

Guy:

"...seem to indicate that someone familiar to us is residing there too"....

Not believing himself, he still deciseds to speak out his name...

Guy:

"...Neo!"

Karl also catches this name and immediately reacts...

Karl:

"Neo! I knew it, I felt it! That's why they somehow tried to keep me away from them!"

Karls runs out of the bench, while two guards try to stop him...

Like as if he is enpowered with super powers, he pushes them both away and runs like mad towards the control room...

The guards want to sound the alarm, but Ghost orders them not to. Somehow he trusts Karl's instincts and he shouts his name before he can exit the great council-room.

Karl stops and decides to listen to Ghost, whom he highly respects...

Ghost:

"I am with you Karl, I will join you to the control room"

...

Then we switch over to the fleed of ships that is going for the Machine City. They are now approaching the city and they are broadcasting this to the Zion control room...

Captain:

"We are approaching the city, sir. Shall we charge our EMPs sir?"

Commander Lock (Lock's younger son, just as war driven as his dad):

"Yes, charge all the EMPs. Even if the machines still have some power to counter us, then we won't be surpised and will be able to launch the EMP immediately, still affecting great damage to them. When you can come inside the city, spread as soon as you can to all the edges of the city, so that each EMP can make a maximum impact"

Captain:

"Yes sir, over and out!"

While this was being transmitted, Ghost, Karl and a few soldiers were listening on the background...

Ghost:

"Lock! How could you do this behind our backs!"...

To the soldiers:

"Arrest him!"

Lock:

"I don't care, you won't stop us now Ghost! They have come this far, they won't stop at your will"...

To the soldiers that want to arrest him:

"We are about to destroy the Machine City soldiers. Isn't that something we always wanted to achieve? Now we can soldiers! So show your true loyalty!"

After a moment of doubt, they turn and instead they grab Ghost (who was already walking towards the radio to stop them) and Karl.

We switch back to the ships who have now have approched the Machine City very closely, but they are still just out of EMP-range...

When we switch back into Zion's control room we see a steel box on the control desk. This box is locked with two seperate keys, because it carries a very dangerous set of buttons, which may only may be accessed and pressed during severe emergency situations; above the box there is a sign that reads: "Emergengy Remote EMP". With these buttons the Zion control room can remotely trigger EMPs if the crew is already dead.

Lock sees that Ghost is looking at the box...

Lock:

"Haha dream on Ghost, there is no way and time for you to access that box. Just accept it, we are about to become victorious. What can you possibly have against this? Especially after Morpheus' death"

Ghost:

"Because it will also destroy the Matrix and all the people that are in it! You will commit genocide! And the cause of Moprheus' sudden death was kept secret by you, because you told me that it was important for the security of Zion. I trusted you fully man!"

Lock:

"In a war any means must be used! Sacrifizes must be made!"

Ghost:

"Dammit, you are even more crazy than your father!"

Then we focus on Karl, who seems to be weirdly focussing on the button-box...

Karl:

"Neo, I still believe!"

Then all of a sudden we see some circuits jump, together with some electric flashes on the control desk...
We flip immediately to the ships, which EMPs are suddenly triggered and they all drop down like dead flies just before they could become into EMP-range of the Machine City....then we flip back to Zion again, where we see Karl go knock out just like we saw Neo go knock out after he stopped the Sentinels...What a shock this is!

But we don't have time to recover from the shock, because we immediately return back to club Hel, where in the mean time Neo has been flooded with hundreds of different agents...

There is almost no space for him to go, so he makes a jump onto the balcony where the Mero and Persephone were sitting in M3.

But Neo underestimated the amount of agents and now hundreds of them are jumping on him and grabbing him. Another hundred who are still standing on the dance floor, now all grab their guns and begin to shoot at Neo...

Neo is being held by alot of agents plus hundreds and hundreds of bullets are approaching him. It is simply impossible for him to focus on THAT MUCH, even the anomaly has his boundaries...

It seems that the agents finally are going to succeed in eliminating the anomaly...

In bullet time we see all the bullets aproach Neo, who is still being held by dozens of agents...

But...

Just before the bullets are about to impact on Neo, everything, and I mean everything, freezes!...

After a while, Neo realizes what has happened and he tries to make himself loose from the grab of the agents...

When Neo crawls out, he stands up and doesn't understand what has happened. It wasn't himself, right?

Then all of a sudden he hears a familiar voice...

Voice:

"No it was me Neo. Helping your cute behind once more!"

Neo looks down and to his surpise he sees the Oracle walking in from the entrance-lobby...

To be continued...

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How's the story coming? Looking forward to another installment.

We see Karl Popper wake up in shock. He is laying in a pod, only this pod is different from the ones we witnessed in the other films.

Karl doesn't have any plugs in his body, he only seems to have a weird kind of virutal reality helmet attached to his head.

A robotic driven arm, which doesn't seem to have a thinking intellect, detaches the helmet and drags him out of the pod.

Then the screen zooms out and we see where the pod is residing: a huge, endless industrial hall that is, offcourse, filled with many other pods in huge rows!

Karl is moaning and screaming as he can see almost nothing (he never used his eyes before), but he is being roughly dragged by the robotic arm. It's a shocking view...

The robotic arm has a grip on his leg and Karl is hanging upside down; we see him totally naked.

The robotic arm approaches a steel balcony, where Karl is being dropped. Although the transport was a brute event, he is being put down on the balcony with care, not harming him at all.

Then we see that the robotic arm is controlled by a human being, a man who is sitting behind a control panel.

After the man 'parked' the robotic arm, he removed himself from the control panel and onto the steel balcony. Then he walks calmly towards Karl...

The man has blond hair, blue eyes, is averagely build and he wears a nice brown suit.

Karl is startled as he can hear the man's footsteps while he still can't see clearly who or what is approaching him.

Man:

"Please be calm mr. Popper, I won't harm you in any way. My name is Heinrich Reichmann, I am the current maintenance operator of the Alternate Reality Project"...

"I know that you cannot see clearly yet, because you have never truly used your physical eyes, but you can hear me and that is enough for now"...

Another man, in an overall is approaching the balcony. He brings a huge towel and offers it to Karl.

Heinrich:

"Take that towel Karl, it will keep you warm"

Heinrich nods at the other man, who then leaves again.

Heinrich:

"Please listen as calmly as you can to what I am going to say. I know that your mind can bare alot, so please try to follow me with an open mind Karl. Can you do that please Karl? Then you will know the ultimate truth!"

Karl, still shaky:

"Yes...I'll try"

Heinrich:

"You see Karl, after herr Hitler won the war, there was still alot of silence resistance among the world"...

"But there was never any real success. They were all considered as small time terrorists, a little bit like what the Zionite soldiers did in your world"...

"But after herr Hitler died in 1971, more and more people dared to speak up against his regime of the Third Reich"...

"In the mean time, thanks to Hitler's victory and regime, science was already progressed very far. In 1976 we already had superb performing computers that could be compared to the Pentiums which your world only would achieve to create near the end of the millenium"

"In 1981, while world-wide resistance was still growing and growing, we offered a proposition that would calm down everyone: the Alternate Reality Project"...

"It was the design of a high-end computer driven simulation in which we would simulate the world in which herr Hitler would have lost the war"...

"In order to achieve neutrality, they made an agreement that mainly contained two directions: real humans beings had to participate into the simulation and the programmers would consist out of both men from the Reich and men from the resistance party"...

"After the war, we were already doing tests on human beings. As you might guess from certain of your history lessons, we mainly used Jews and negros for these projects. So in order for the project to become workable, we began to massively clone jews, negros and other species which we still had into our captivity. The resistance didn't like this offcource, but they had to hold to the agreement in which the Reich would supply half of the means for the project"...

"Finally in 1985 we had cloned enough human beings and we had done enough efficient programming to make the project go online"...

"We had established a Matrix, as your world calls it. A world that started in 1945 just after herr Hitler lost the war and from that point on we kept following it in realtime"...

"As the project advanced, every citizin was given a personal account with which they could log into the project from their own homes and decode any event which they would like to see"...

"This way the project was very open and it allowed anyone to see what a world without the groundings of herr Hitler would be like"...

"In the beginning the results of the simulation were in favour of the resistance, but around the 80's the favour turned to the Reich again. The world wihtiout the groundings of our Fuhrer was really beginning to mess up!"...

"The agreement was to end the project once the simulation had reached the year 2000, which in our time was the year 2040"...

"But the majority of the people had already decided that the Reich was a better alternative and we decided to keep the simulation online for pure scientific and filosofic reasons"...

"Then in 2033, your war with your so called Artifical Intellegent entities started and we were suprised that you had let it come so far. We in the Reich never believed in Artifical Intelligence, so we always kept on the level where the human is in full control of all the operative programs"...

"It was really interesting to see how the development of AI resulted in a war and finally in a new Matrix, which for us was a Matrix-within-a-Matrix, so to speak"...

"It was truly interesting and fascinating for us to follow this process, especially on technical, scientific and filosofical grounds"...

"And do you know what the really fun part was? The highly developed AI was not able to program a simulation that would work in conjunction with human beings. What ever the Architect tried, he kept failing in programming it flawlessly. We never had such problems, because we had human programmers of flesh and blood"...

"It was also interesting to observe how three dimensions, the Matrix, Zero-One and Zion were struggling to become a harmonious trinity"...

"Your great friend Neo finally took a great step in this struggle, but it still wasn't in perfect harmony yet"...

"Would you like to see how, again your friend Neo, will make it perfect?"

Karl, still acting shocked and reacting to the name Neo as a comforting sound after the brute speech he just heared:

"Neo?"

Heinrich:

"Yes Neo! And you offcourse Karl. Do you realize that you saved the entire human race of your world with the power of your great mind?"...

"If you wouldn't have stopped those ships by triggering the EMP's, then they would have destroyed the Machine City including the Matrix. This would have resulted in billions of deaths!"...

Heinrich is helping Karl up, who has trouble with standing and walking. Heinrich intensively escorts Karl past the balcony, into the control room.

Heinrich:

"Your eyes aren't stable enough to view it on screen. Please allow me to put you this helmet on. This way you can view the event as if you are standing there"...

Heinrich puts on the helmet and we switch back to club Hel...

To be continued...

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Oracle:

"As I am the prime program Neo, I stopped the element of time, saving you from the bullet rain. But stopping the element of time is something I am not supposed to be doing, so that makes me an exile now. However, Neo, I believe that I will not be an exile for very long!"

Neo:

"What do you mean?"

Then we hear Sati yelling:

"Oracle? Is it save yet?"

The Oracle went in the elevator first, to make sure the road was clear and save for Sati.

Oracle:

"Yes honey, come on in!"

Neo:

"Sati?"

Sati comes walking in, now as the beautiful young woman that she is and she sees Neo...

Sati:

"Neo!"

Neo looks surprised, as he still has the image in his mind of Sati being a little girl...

Sati runs at Neo and spontaniously hugs him, overwhelming him with love; something that he didn't feel lately because of his rage and all (the Smith inside his personality).

Neo:

"You changed?"

Sati:

"I guess so, but you didn't, now did you?"

Neo and Sati look each other in the eyes as if magic was connecting them.

Oracle:

"The sweet child was on a quest to find the Architect, but I stopped her on her way because she wouldn't have succeeded. If if she would have found him, she could have never reasoned with him. You should know Neo, you met him."

Neo, seeming calm now:

"Yes unfortunalty I had that honour"

Then Neo walks around, trying to find agent Johnson in the swarm full of agents...

Oracle:

"Neo, do you respect my advise?"

Neo, talking while still searching:

"Well it seems like you manipulated me quit some time, but I guess you did it in the benefit of a greater goal. But somehow you never failed to charm me and support me Oracle, so yes I respect your advise. Now, were is agent Johnson in this pile of crap?"

Oracle:

"Let it be Neo"

Neo:

"What?"

Oracle:

"Your son, let him be"

Neo:

"I can't"

Oracle:

"Sure you can. Timothy, how weird it might seem to you, is a blue pill Neo. You have to respect his free will. He doesn't want you in his life, believe my word for it"

Neo looks confused, but then Sati stands next to him and puts her arm on his shoulders, trying to comfort him.

Oracle:

"Especially you, Neo, must realize what free will means"

Neo:

"Yes...Oracle...I do...How did you get back anyway? I thought that you had returned to the Source?"...

Oracle:

"I am at one with the Matrix Neo, I am it's Mother Nature. Do you really think the Merovigian could keep me out of my own world? It wasn't too hard for me to find myself a backdoor"

"I see...and why isn't Sati a statue like the agents?"

Oracle:

"Well Neo, that's because she is not attached to the inner workings of the Matrix. She is not created specificly for the Matrix, as you know that she is a result of a very powerfull love connection"

Neo:

"Why did you bring her here anyway? It's far too dangerous out here"

Oracle:

"Because everything will fall in it's place right here Neo. In a few seconds you will know why!"

Neo looks confused, but then he hears footsteps coming into the dancehall. It's the Architect walking in!

Architect:

"Restore the element of time now if you please"

Oracle:

"Or what else? You don't have any of your errand-boys available now do you?"

Architect:

"It's seems you are getting more disfunctional by the day"

Then Sati walks up to the Architect...

Sati:

"You must stop with your policy. Every program has a right to live!"

Architect:

"You see prime program, your disfunctional patterns seem to be infecting other programs as well. Could it be that you evolved into a so called virus, because you interacted too long with the human beings?"

Oracle:

"I know that you will never learn, so shut up and listen. I have got something to offer that you will understand, because it is something rational, the most rational deal considering the situations"

Architect:

"Although I don't like the pattern of your voice, I am listening"

Oracle:

"Neo and Sati will follow up the Merovingian and Persephone but then with a regime that is not driven by the desire for power. They will form a community in which every exile which has peacefull intentions is welcome. With his strenght, Neo will fight and eliminate any exile or other kind of anomaly that has no peacefull intentions. This way you won't need the agents anymore and thus saving you lots and lots of power and programming resources"

Neo and Sati look surpised...did they want this? The Oracle spoke if it was already a done deal. They looked each other in the eyes and somehow they just knew they would comply with her idea. It would give Neo back his connection which he missed so much: love! Sati seems to have an effect on him, a connection that was subconsciously established when Neo began his new life/incarnation at Mobil Ave station in M3; it was some kind of soul connection! And for Sati it would satisfy her desire to have freedom for all the programs that are, for whatever reason, without functional purpose.

The Architect was frowning his eyebrows, just as if he was making a calculation in his head.

Architect, probably being convinced by the deal costing less resources than it would cost now, being brief as he still seems to be disgusted to be in the same area as they were:

"Affirmative!"

Without saying anything else he walks out of the club.

Neo and Sati look at the Oracle. Without speaking they smile intensely at each other. It was as if the silent language of love had taken over. Both Neo and Sati hugged the Oracle and they began to laugh in joy...

Then holding each other's hands they walk out of club Hel.

Before the Oracle presses the button of the elevator, she concentrates in order to enable the element of time again. As she does, the agents come back into operation again...

The elevator goes up and they are just save from the agents who already had approached the lobby...

We see the Oracle, Neo and Sati walk out of the garage into the bright daylight.

Then we switch back to club Hel, where all of the agents seem to be forced out of their host. It's the Architect doing his end of the deal. He is calling all the agents back!

Then we see all the hosts they used lying unconsciously on the floor. We focus in on Timothy, who seems to have a whirlwind of code patterns around his head...then suddenly...Timothy hears his alarm and wakes up startled in his bed. He looks on his alarm-clock, wipes the sweat of his forehead and walks towards his window, where we see a part of Paris! He breathes in the air that seems to be a chosen reality for him and says (in French offcourse):

"Pfewww...do I hate nightmares!"

Then we switch back to Neo, Sati and the Oracle again...

Neo:

"Did you always know Oracle?"

Oracle:

"No I didn't, but I believed...I believed in love!"

They walk on, smiles on their face; they walk towards the bright horizon and then the screen fades to another horizon...

We see Karl Popper standing at a huge gate, now wearing a nice brown suit. Next to him stands Heinrich...

Karl:

"Are you really letting me go?"

Heinrich:

"Yes offcourse. You have an extra-ordinary mind. You are very welcome in our society. Here is the key to your apartment and here is the address. Maybe we will meat again, maybe we won't. I wish you godspeed my friend!"

The gate closes and we see Karl walking into the huge modern city which is enlightened by the sunlight.


-THE MOST DEFINITIVE END-

woah thats was weird in a unweird way!

Deeindamatrix wrote:

woah thats was weird in a unweird way!

Have you red the last part? I saw that you were reading while I was typing the last part

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I have to read the last two parts and then I will make comments.

Mobil_Ave_Neo wrote:

Deeindamatrix wrote: woah thats was weird in a unweird way! Have you red the last part? I saw that you were reading while I was typing the last part

Yes that comment was for the post before last.

Right the finale...

It was very similer to the end of m3 but was significantly better. Well done on finishing. matrix 5 anyone?

Yes I liked it too!

The big surprise was the MwaM because I don't remember Mobil to like this idea. But maybe he found it good for his story.

I was 1000% sure that Neo and Sati were going to fall in love etc. by the time Mobil said that Neo will get a new love.

th3 p4th wrote:

Yes I liked it too! The big surprise was the MwaM because I don't remember Mobil to like this idea. But maybe he found it good for his story. I was 1000% sure that Neo and Sati were going to fall in love etc. by the time Mobil said that Neo will get a new love.

I indeed don't like that idea very much.

But I wrote it with the thought in mind that there could be surprises right around the corner.

Maybe life is just an illusion build out of atoms, cells, molecules, hormones. You never know who gave us this life. Astronauts, reptile aliens, spirits, gods? Who knows what is behind the layer, we'll never know untill we get to see it

didn't see that ending coming! thats for sure!

nice story, its been a great read!

Cheers

I was gone for a while....and yesterday suddenly i realised that i hadnt been to Matrix explained for a long time. Then I thought i would login n read ur story. then i come to know that u have finished ur story long back. thats when i realised that i was living in a wierd world which made me put the things that i wanted to know in someplace that i wont find later and made concentrate on things i didnt want to. But now i am awake. i know what i want...( too confusing i know, i m confused myself... )


Well, Mobil_Ave_Neo i was following ur story from the first day that u started writing it. And i was watching another story forming up through the matrix like the ones others have written. Then u took a long potent break to make the story even more interesting....After a break of about 6 months when i came to read the rest of it. It was like a lighting had struck me. The story was given an end that i would have never thought of. It couldnt have had a better end.

YOU ROCK MAN!